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    dots Submission Name: los ángeles caídosdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 754
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 420



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    dotslos ángeles caídosdots
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    I slide
    into a fade
    ING
    World
    Of stagnant pools
    Stark reflection
    And haunted lives
    the moon's rays
    Stay a perpetual gray
    I ate death with velocity
    Yesterday
    And now I
    Fear the breath
    of
    Angels
    Forsaken
    Fell
    and
    Falling
    For they remember the spoken
    Word of God




    Submitted on 2014-01-05 18:14:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      For me this is the poem and I particularly like this as the first line:

    I ate death with velocity
    Yesterday
    And now I
    Fear the breath
    of
    Angels
    Forsaken
    Fell
    and
    Falling
    For they remember the spoken
    Word of God

    But you probably think you need all that stuff about stagnant pools and gray moon rays at the beginning for atmosphere or something.




    | Posted on 2014-01-08 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      I still can never get the video to just pop up.
    | Posted on 2014-01-07 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't have any comments on the poem yet. Just the title so far. Did you mean Angels? Here's something I found for Angeles:

    http://youtu.be/yJIPVhQgcz8
    | Posted on 2014-01-07 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]


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