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    dots Submission Name: Into Expansesdots
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    Author: raspberry89
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 5/18/22
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    Parables learned the hard way can be haunting
    In a life lived solitary lonely and wanting
    But this is what I get for trying to trap a star
    An emotional scar, smothering radiance mars
    The balance of things was too upset
    And the other stargazers couldn't forget
    The pressure quickly became unstable
    It’s like I was searching for truth in a fable
    You may think you know who a person is
    But blinding is the star that is burdened like this
    It's bound to become an illusion of what you wish it could be
    When you do good you should throw it in the sea
    Don't drink poison to quench a thirst
    In morals the sad man must become well versed




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      Ah, good old ontological deontology, I had hoped knowing it would make me less sad. Alas, perhaps it is idealistic illusion.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-01-06 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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