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    dots Submission Name: Flying Timedots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFlying Timedots
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    The tick and tock
    of this clock
    Is maddening to me
    Time is supposed to be on lock
    But all I find is stormy sea.

    They say that while you're having fun
    Time must be a'flyin'
    So what does time do nowadays
    As I lay here dying?




    Submitted on 2014-01-06 10:54:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I honestly like how you put in the happy

    They say that while you're having fun
    Time must be a'flyin'

    And then add the dark twist


    So what does time do nowadays
    As I lay here dying?

    Very well written. Short and simple.
    Keep up the good work :)
    ~Tay
    | Posted on 2014-01-06 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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