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Flying Time


Author: TheSnoitart
ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53 /64 /52
Words: 50
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Flying Time


The tick and tock
of this clock
Is maddening to me
Time is supposed to be on lock
But all I find is stormy sea.

They say that while you're having fun
Time must be a'flyin'
So what does time do nowadays
As I lay here dying?




Submitted on 2014-01-06 10:54:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I honestly like how you put in the happy

They say that while you're having fun
Time must be a'flyin'

And then add the dark twist


So what does time do nowadays
As I lay here dying?

Very well written. Short and simple.
Keep up the good work :)
~Tay
| Posted on 2014-01-06 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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