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    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/343/209
    Words: 279
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    new felt-tip pens, the splurge
    of berry light coloursplashing
    in windowdrops, beercans exploding
    and revealing the halo of
    non-corporate body-rocking;

    excuse the mess in my head:
    I am morphic, straining to sieve
    all pertinent bits of
    information

    stream stream stream
    and mindhunt the 100 shot club

    looking for reason
    and popcorn to soothe
    the familiar smells
    of mama's cooking,
    daddy's bacon
    coming home
    to please the family

    like I knew that you
    would figure it all out, sonnet-like;
    the urge is rain and snow
    upon the mantel-top
    of spiral Maori designs:
    mine's the manaia,
    a phoenix taniwha
    protective spirit, emulating
    the waves that crash over,
    destroying the impure people,
    the ones who don't listen
    to the stream stream stream

    and we dreamweave over.

    the return, boondocks
    and sailors queueing, screaming
    for disc two, the episode
    before the trilogy, the key turn
    of blue, of green phone-rings,
    each power socket blended
    in a recipe
    bound
    for Narnia.

    remember reading that
    and wondering how a wardrobe
    could fit as a nexus portal
    to another world, another place
    where we could all forget
    instead of wondering
    how much milk we have left;

    it's at least two-eighty
    for a two litre bottle,
    at the most a twenty note
    for everything needed
    before the world erupts
    in flame, the 2012 end
    of this epoch according
    to those crazy
    astrologically-tainted
    Mayans

    but hell, I believe them,
    I know this place is surging;
    it's a connection sundered,
    a bluebottle
    on the beach
    squashed flat
    like

    like

    stream stream streams
    streaming data, impersonal
    ambiguous stripshows

    but don't get depressed,
    we all know.




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