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    dots Submission Name: dada at 4.30 p.m.dots
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    Author: trinityfinger
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    dotsdada at 4.30 p.m.dots
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    the cold sun of your coffee
    behind photos of you

    in a crimson shirt. a green
    chair sits beside your left

    arm, hands tracing the word
    for 'bottlecaps' in sign

    language. note each symbol
    down in textbooks. bunch

    each lonely page into a
    brick and slam it against

    the endless array of white
    toilets. another building meant

    to tickle you to sleep. another
    field of wheat, furrowed

    between your brows.
    wake.




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