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    dots Submission Name: Walked Awaydots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
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    Description:
       My now ex-husband and I had fallen into drugs heavily many years ago. We had taken a length break and found ourselves together again... a year after being together I relapsed. I'm not perfect I needed help and I wish he could have been the one to help me.. I am happily clean and sober and have been for quite some time now and that is what "My Dear Friend" is referring to as well as "Battle" two poems I posted here on Elite which are very close to my heart for it was alot to over come.


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    dotsWalked Awaydots
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    I loved you with everything I had
    and it use to be enough
    I gave you everything I had ...
    until I had nothing left to give

    We came together... I was doing well
    I hoped that would continue for us as a couple...
    As Husband and Wife...
    However I couldn't have been more wrong

    Whatever brought us back together
    Also brought back the darkness within my life
    Darkness representing "My Dear Friend"....
    It didn't take long til its hooks were once again deep within

    Back into that deadly cycle I went...
    You did nothing but aid my addiction
    Nothing but enable me to fall further...
    And as I fell...

    You, my husband ... Went wondering for another companion ...
    You choose to ignore the vows you said in front of me ... in front of God?
    You turned your back on me for I had fallen and fallen hard
    You left me alone, broken, and beaten ...

    For all I wanted was endless happiness with you
    I wanted that white picket fence
    Our future daughter Alexandra ...
    I wanted the same things as you...

    But I needed your help getting there
    Yet you choose to leave your wife..
    as groveling for help...
    begging for a helping hand...
    As that "Battle" raged on you walked away...




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