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    dots Submission Name: What The Helldots

    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Expressing the reality of a search for love.

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    dotsWhat The Helldots

    What the hell happened
    to my knight and white horse?
    Instead of fairytales,
    girls are guaranteed divorce.

    What the hell happened
    to my house on a hill?
    Picket fences are replaced
    with barred windowsills.

    What the hell happened
    to wanting a kiss in the rain?
    Girls forfeit their bodies,
    rather than abstain.

    All the frogs that I find
    never transform into a prince.
    All that I've come across
    are toads ever since

    I began on this journey
    for my happily ever after.
    Where's the author of MY book?
    'Cause right now I want to slap her.

    Submitted on 2014-01-08 20:50:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Eh, very lirical, I enjoyed the light hearted merry-go-round of broken dreams.
    Good rhyme and good rhythm. A little light poem is ggod for the soul now and then. It doesn't have any faults in my eyes.
    | Posted on 2014-01-24 00:00:00 | by Akiko Hime | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this..it made me smile, in a very cynical way..because it's nothing but the truth.
    | Posted on 2014-01-22 00:00:00 | by TiaanK | [ Reply to This ]

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