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Submission Name: Estrangement dots

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Author:	lolaxelmo
ASL Info:	23/F/IA
Elite Ratio:	2.96 - 34/37/38
Words:	46

Class/Type:	Poetry/Nature
Total Views:	608
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	340

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Estrangement dots

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estranged in winter—
glue turned blood wishes
to stop flow, dry and
break like plastic—
a hangover from a
previous season
when change alerted me of time,
forward momentum in colors
from green of summer
fallen to a brown ground,
premeditating a dying season.

Submitted on 2014-01-08 21:19:05 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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The title's very pertinent. Adds a new dimension to the seasonal change it depicts. Things r subtly turned different within a more conventional pattern- as with "break like plastic". Liked the curt style.
| Posted on 2014-01-09 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]

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