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    dots Submission Name: Estrangementdots
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    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsEstrangementdots
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    estranged in winter—
    glue turned blood wishes
    to stop flow, dry and
    break like plastic—
    a hangover from a
    previous season
    when change alerted me of time,
    forward momentum in colors
    from green of summer
    fallen to a brown ground,
    premeditating a dying season.




    Submitted on 2014-01-08 21:19:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The title's very pertinent. Adds a new dimension to the seasonal change it depicts. Things r subtly turned different within a more conventional pattern- as with "break like plastic". Liked the curt style.
    | Posted on 2014-01-09 00:00:00 | by Snow9 | [ Reply to This ]


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