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    dots Submission Name: the dark goodbyedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsthe dark goodbyedots
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    I am a dark goodbye
    Folded
    And placed neatly
    Beside your heart

    Here I lie like a sleeping sigh
    Waiting
    Until now
    I am covered by the frost
    of forgotten forevers

    Remember
    Once
    upon a time
    When every breath was
    Warm honey

    So

    Sweet upon
    Our
    Parted lips
    It dripped over the
    Vast
    Edge of Love








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    ||| Comments |||
      This is just sad really. First stanza is quite lovely in a melancholic way. Like you already know a storm is coming, you see it but you wait for it to arrive rather than run away.
    | Posted on 2014-04-10 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is short for one of yours! You feeling ok?
    | Posted on 2014-03-10 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]


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