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the dark goodbye


Author: DaleP
ASL Info:    57/M/TX
Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 632 /554 /330
Words: 75
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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the dark goodbye


I am a dark goodbye
Folded
And placed neatly
Beside her heart

Here I lie, a sleeping sigh
Almost
covered by the frost
of a forgotten forever

Perhaps someday she

Will

Remember

Once
upon a time
When every breath was
Warm honey

So

Sweet upon
Our
Parted lips
It dripped over the
Vast
Edge of Love








Submitted on 2014-01-13 22:22:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is just sad really. First stanza is quite lovely in a melancholic way. Like you already know a storm is coming, you see it but you wait for it to arrive rather than run away.
| Posted on 2014-04-10 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this is short for one of yours! You feeling ok?
| Posted on 2014-03-10 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]


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