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    dots Submission Name: the dark goodbyedots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsthe dark goodbyedots

    I am a dark goodbye
    And placed neatly
    Beside your heart

    Here I lie like a sleeping sigh
    Until now
    I am covered by the frost
    of forgotten forevers

    upon a time
    When every breath was
    Warm honey


    Sweet upon
    Parted lips
    It dripped over the
    Edge of Love

    Submitted on 2014-01-13 22:22:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is just sad really. First stanza is quite lovely in a melancholic way. Like you already know a storm is coming, you see it but you wait for it to arrive rather than run away.
    | Posted on 2014-04-10 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is short for one of yours! You feeling ok?
    | Posted on 2014-03-10 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]

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