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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Imperfections from the head to the feet.
    Mind and heart, having scars.
    Wrapped in the chaos, an abundance of love.
    Stashed away behind bars.

    Seeping out, like the light of day.
    Casting shadows on those far and near.
    Calling for guidance, strength and patience,
    But no ears would turn to hear.

    Not a single chance was giving,
    Tears weren't the only thing lost.
    Its a different kind of beauty
    The kind that comes with a cost.

    The warmth from the soul grows colder,
    Like ice to ease a pain.
    Compassion that once flew freely,
    Now tangled in a chain.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I ran into this phenomenon when I was your age also. Like we can't really go on loving like children! There are problems to confront. My advise, don't lose the warmth of your soul to it. There are those of us who still believe in the power of love unchained, like sunrise on a new day we need it.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-01-16 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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