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    dots Submission Name: Road Tripdots

    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 417
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       This didn't get finished. I'm sorry guys. It will be completed along with tomorrows poems if I don't wake up in time tonight.

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    dotsRoad Tripdots

    I need a new avenue to travel
    A shortcut or a new motive
    steep learning curve deterring
    traffic but I'm determined
    to make it

    I need a car for this trip
    rather pedestrian without
    destined but not devout
    tired of hitchhiking about
    can't get around

    The world is ripe fruit
    fresh for the taking
    ready to be plucked
    digested I'm escaping
    to higher ground

    Submitted on 2014-01-17 15:54:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You know after reading this several times my mind concocted an extravagantly licentious (and perhaps enjoyable) comment, a real psychic reggae of regalia, but I don't want to seem shallow and insensitive or worse illiterate so I'm going to refrain. My but your inspirational, oh well.

    | Posted on 2014-01-18 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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