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    dots Submission Name: Birchdots

    Author: KimmyMim
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 223/303/117
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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    A moment in time...inspired.

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    A sunless Winter morning might discourage.

    However, I find nothing more absolutely pleasing
    than to pause, even linger at length,
    at the sight of a well formed,
    white Birch by herself,
    in the very center
    of an empty field.

    As she slept, she was gently clothed
    with a blanket of fresh fallen snow.

    Alone myself, I could understand her nature.
    Still, I stood spellbound by her innocence,
    knowing she never made request,
    or spoke a word to complain of her chill,
    as I would have.

    Nettled with the monochrome, I determined
    a splash of color should enhance her beauty.

    I began to imagine a brainish Blue Jay
    who might perch for perspective,
    or a Cardinal pair may flutter in to cuddle
    and rest their tired selves upon a limb.

    Perhaps, my eyes might happen
    on a final golden leaf, held tight
    through Autumn's Twilight,
    as it bent and twisted
    in unseeable breezes,
    and suddenly broke free
    from this new mantle,
    just to catch my eye.

    Imperfectly, I thought
    to make more perfect
    this perfection.

    What right have I?

    Already well pleased in her condition,
    she did not appear weighed down.
    She was generously given what she needed.
    Changes were noticeably unnecessary.
    With her, I shared a moment of humility.

    As I turned to walk away
    I saw her limbs reach high to applaud
    the fine skill of her Maker.

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      I too love the way a solitary birch, denuded of leafy finery and feathers, seems so serene in winter time,--limbs uplifted as if in supplication. Thanks for reminding me of this,--reminding me to try to capture these thoughts once again, as you have here. Beautiful!
    | Posted on 2014-01-30 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      You know, I know it's not going to make much sense considering the platonic nature of ES but I could fall in love with a woman such as you. Seriously, I enjoyed this thoroughly, great stuff!!

    | Posted on 2014-01-20 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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