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    dots Submission Name: Broken Horizon of Hurt dots
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    Author: Apoetwcloudenvy
    Elite Ratio:    1.44 - 6/9/10
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dots Broken Horizon of Hurt dots
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    I set here wondering about all these pieces laid before me 
    Just trying to piece everything back together
    How
    How did it get this far
    How did it collapse so easy
    To go from a blossoming adventure
    To this stain life of regret
    But as I ponder why and what
    It like these pieces only become smaller and frail
    The pain from the augment still pierces my ears
    A shattered vocal
    Yet the pain will not leave this still beating heart
    I just wanted us
    And
    You wanted perfection
    A word that is just made-up expression

    We were caught up in the present
    Not seeking the future
    Only holding to the past
    Baggage that dragged us to this pit of sorrow
    Now you and I sit here collecting these remaining pieces
    Adding them to our already large bag

    All I hope that one another can one day leave these bags in the past And seek the future over the horizon




    Submitted on 2014-01-19 19:06:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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