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    dots Submission Name: Rebels and Rain Checksdots

    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRebels and Rain Checksdots

    I wish we could've been free
    to be all molotov and black bandanas
    we're both better that way

    Rebels with a cause
    and reason to be angry
    because we were a few good men
    in over our heads

    I'd do things differently
    if I could change the past
    and we'd walk taller
    and stand for something

    I think we both had heart
    but this world stoned it
    with its sourness

    I cowered at the burden
    you sighed at lessons learned
    and we went too fast

    We didn't have time to build
    or find a footing
    but we weren't looking

    Too busy playing house
    making love
    and wasting days

    If I could do it all again
    I'd be better
    at making this a life
    instead of a living

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