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    dots Submission Name: My Heart is a Work in Progressdots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy Heart is a Work in Progressdots
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    All you were
    in the madhouse funhouse in my head
    it's melting, melting
    wicked witches in the rain
    your smiling face
    slowly replaced by
    a pile of molten slag.

    A few more nights
    and I might not even
    remember what you look like.

    Still
    I miss you.
    But that'll change, too.




    Submitted on 2014-01-20 22:15:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know the feeling.especially the not remembering faces
    | Posted on 2014-02-02 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwww, dealing with terminated love affairs can be so disconcerting. Stay true to your course. One must love themselves to love others. It seems it must be her to rebuild that pile of slag. The worst of this is to me……….were addictive.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2014-01-20 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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