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    dots Submission Name: There Is Just So Muchdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Rant/Satire
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    dotsThere Is Just So Muchdots
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    I just long to be this person I am not
    I ache to be someone inspirational
    I long to be a hero
    Someone whose heartache and misfortunes have in all actuality helped them to help others
    I want to be stable in every sense of the word "Stable"
    I wish to only have to work one job to pay these bills
    I want to motivate others
    I wish to change my ways
    I long to break bad habits

    I ache for so much
    I know its all possible
    Yet the road I will be forced to walk seems a bit overwhelming
    A constant up hill battle I am forced to go head on with

    Can I make it?
    Will I fall?
    Am I alone in this journey?





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    You write with so much sincerity and heart. This is only the second one I've read but they are honest. You put your wishes/wants on the page and as a reader I felt them.

    Thoughts on the gist, self improvement is a constant revolving door for there is always room for more to be accomplished. We are ever changing and it is not always easy but so worth the effort.

    Good job,
    Peace
    | Posted on 2014-05-23 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      A wonderful piece. All of us, at one time or another, have felt like the words in your poem. Keep pushing forward...there is always hope...

    Take care,

    Kelly
    | Posted on 2014-04-13 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved it
    | Posted on 2014-02-02 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      When you want something you've never had, you have to do something you've never done before. We cannot become what we need to be by remaining what we are.
    A poem asking the obvious questions ey? Well I guess we all ask ourselves retorical questions from now and then, I guess them being black on white is fine as well.
    | Posted on 2014-01-24 00:00:00 | by Akiko Hime | [ Reply to This ]


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