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    dots Submission Name: There Is Just So Muchdots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Rant/Satire
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    dotsThere Is Just So Muchdots

    I just long to be this person I am not
    I ache to be someone inspirational
    I long to be a hero
    Someone whose heartache and misfortunes have in all actuality helped them to help others
    I want to be stable in every sense of the word "Stable"
    I wish to only have to work one job to pay these bills
    I want to motivate others
    I wish to change my ways
    I long to break bad habits

    I ache for so much
    I know its all possible
    Yet the road I will be forced to walk seems a bit overwhelming
    A constant up hill battle I am forced to go head on with

    Can I make it?
    Will I fall?
    Am I alone in this journey?

    Submitted on 2014-01-22 09:39:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    You write with so much sincerity and heart. This is only the second one I've read but they are honest. You put your wishes/wants on the page and as a reader I felt them.

    Thoughts on the gist, self improvement is a constant revolving door for there is always room for more to be accomplished. We are ever changing and it is not always easy but so worth the effort.

    Good job,
    | Posted on 2014-05-23 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      A wonderful piece. All of us, at one time or another, have felt like the words in your poem. Keep pushing forward...there is always hope...

    Take care,

    | Posted on 2014-04-13 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved it
    | Posted on 2014-02-02 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      When you want something you've never had, you have to do something you've never done before. We cannot become what we need to be by remaining what we are.
    A poem asking the obvious questions ey? Well I guess we all ask ourselves retorical questions from now and then, I guess them being black on white is fine as well.
    | Posted on 2014-01-24 00:00:00 | by Akiko Hime | [ Reply to This ]

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