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    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/343/209
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    there
    is silence, slow and sinful,
    the flavour of you I dream of night
    after night, this etymology of desire
    cross-twined with the effortless
    and sublime.

    it has been months, months of
    sweat and sleep, the sweat and sleep
    of a blind boy clinging to moths,
    their attraction to light
    a mystery to unlock and cherish
    in suffering, in the quiet angles
    of a morning draped in fog, the road slick with dew
    and the messy palette of wild birds scraped and flattened
    into a tapestry of blood, a fusion of material and conscious,
    a deliverance of cycle upon cycle, a hard yet
    yielding truth of calamity dressed
    as fortune.

    what of this silence
    makes us wary to fight hunger
    with delusion, to decide
    that there is a trinity found
    in the collision of simplicity in the abstract,
    the vengeful in the pure, and in the caged response
    of seeking a road to define you
    in your quest for blindness through redemption,
    the sun a muted coldness upon walls burrowing and closing in
    on heart and mind and visions of how it's all
    quietly meant to be.

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