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    dots Submission Name: Weight in Golddots

    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.29 - 207/277/230
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWeight in Golddots

    She stalks the halls between these chambers
    all flushed out and open minded
    stuck on her like smoke on damp walls
    walking as a ghost through temples
    stripped of time

    She speaks bold and plain
    stark with meaning and cuts
    right to the heart
    of these memories

    I gain little self from this reflection
    proven less bearable in it's repetition
    until all ears are deaf at the mere mention
    of her rose and wicked thorns

    I'd adorn all burden for a chance
    at fairest love and war
    suffering is knowing truth
    amassed a wisdom here
    that digs a hole I bore
    adoring what I'd stored

    These tokens of loss
    prove a passion soul was more
    than twenty one grams and weighted
    cold in a body on the floor

    If measure could by any breadth
    wage or taper spirit worth
    all meaning fails and emptiness
    is all my living work

    Submitted on 2014-01-24 10:57:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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