[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Lovelessdots

    Author: Akiko Hime
    ASL Info:    23/F/Romania
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 25/7/11
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 415
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 704

       I have the image, I have the sound, I just don't have the words yet. It is a tough piece to work on for me.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Oh sweet tragedy how fair you bloom,
    From within the silence of my lover's tomb.

    Clenching your hand if only to feel loneliness,
    I hope will shatter this clear night quietness.

    The shadow of your embrace is suffocating despair,
    For the bind we forged in uncertainty was surely unfair.

    Our cruel stars still await the dawn of time,
    The binding dawn that will never make you mine.

    True words are in a place deeper than gentleness,
    Surely even now that our true world is wordless.

    I will own no more that book with pages of dreams,
    For between them lies a piece of my heart and abyss.

    Submitted on 2014-01-24 21:26:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    Every..... written by jackz
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Happy Saint Patrick's Day written by poetotoe
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    AI written by poetotoe




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]