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    dots Submission Name: They'll Eat You Alivedots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThey'll Eat You Alivedots
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    Every day I face false teeth
    in smile
    empty hugs
    smugness swearing lies
    and people trampling
    rights
    as if this world
    were godless

    Every night my mind
    murders sleep
    in chase
    running ragged
    towards a truth

    Every week I fight
    to keep a path
    and carry straight
    but this burden
    buries me

    Every month I fail
    fall to frauds
    and have to start again
    it's damning

    This has been the way
    I have to live




    Submitted on 2014-01-28 21:29:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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