Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: They'll Eat You Alivedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 719
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 588



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThey'll Eat You Alivedots
    -------------------------------------------


    Every day I face false teeth
    in smile
    empty hugs
    smugness swearing lies
    and people trampling
    rights
    as if this world
    were godless

    Every night my mind
    murders sleep
    in chase
    running ragged
    towards a truth

    Every week I fight
    to keep a path
    and carry straight
    but this burden
    buries me

    Every month I fail
    fall to frauds
    and have to start again
    it's damning

    This has been the way
    I have to live




    Submitted on 2014-01-28 21:29:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    198649

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Every..... written by jackz
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Ache written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    untitled written by ShyOne
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    prison written by ShyOne
    Summer written by layDsayD
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Carry written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry