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    dots Submission Name: Skipping Stonesdots

    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSkipping Stonesdots

    I found her page today
    and she was beautiful
    grinning and excited
    full costume in make-up
    I felt a rush of calm
    a sweetness sorely missed
    caught a photo of our cat
    asleep on a bed corner
    always adorable
    feel my heart swell
    and all at once I love

    I haven't smiled
    this wide in awhile
    she sends shivers
    to my core
    to pulse
    some meaning
    in these moments

    Submitted on 2014-01-29 19:48:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Can I just start by asking how you pick your titles? A lot of times they seem completely unrelated.

    As always, I love your poetry. You have a wonderful way with words that poets need to have. My comments never seem to be helpful, because I don't want you to change anything. That's why I don't generally comment. Haha.

    I will say though, that something about this one seems a little forced. Not really sure what it is though. Maybe the lack of like punctuation or something. I really don't know, because the lack of punctuation never really seemed to cause that before.

    Either way, it's awesome to read something happy. Something about you being happy. Because happy is most obviously a good thing. Hah.

    Anyway. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing; you have a talent that shouldn't be wasted. I love reading your stuff.
    | Posted on 2014-03-08 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]

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