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    dots Submission Name: Dumpster Catdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDumpster Catdots
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    I am foul
    frayed fur
    wrecked
    growing wild
    raw with
    chipped claws
    and a fear
    of everyone

    I am lost
    a scavenger
    treading filth
    eating cores
    and fishing bones

    I am the tone
    of derelict
    suffering
    sour milk
    and abandon

    My eyes beg
    please
    love me anyway




    Submitted on 2014-01-29 23:11:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The whole time I read this -- rather small -- piece, I'm seeing just as much as you describe and it's pretty impressive. I see the cat in my eyes, yet I feel the presence right beside me. I feel as if I'm standing in a dark alley-way, watching the cat dig through rubble and meow in hunger -- and also, I can find the meaning through it.
    It's symbolic yet literal, I like it.
    I can't tell if there's anything wrong with it, because I've found that writing is what you make of it. Styles vary, and no one's to say how a style should go. I like your pattern, so thank you. No grammar issues as far as I can see, either.
    -Chriss.
    | Posted on 2014-02-04 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      And I would. All things/beings need love, regardless of their place, position or status in the universe. Seems easier, however, to love the humble, the suffering, the poor (for me, anyway). They've been left out of the social graces...and are in need of empathy and compassion...which I have been blessed with in abundance. Poor, poor kitty. I'd feed begging eyes...and love his frayed, wrecked fur. This was a treat of a write. I didn't get lost at the first few stanza's as I often do (at no fault to the writer...I think my eyes have more ADHD than the rest of me). This drew me to the end...and brought me here where I felt like I needed to give you a morsel...perhaps because your words were begging? hahaha Thanks for sharing. :) ~K~
    | Posted on 2014-01-31 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]


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