Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Dumpster Catdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 670
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 411



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsDumpster Catdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I am foul
    frayed fur
    wrecked
    growing wild
    raw with
    chipped claws
    and a fear
    of everyone

    I am lost
    a scavenger
    treading filth
    eating cores
    and fishing bones

    I am the tone
    of derelict
    suffering
    sour milk
    and abandon

    My eyes beg
    please
    love me anyway




    Submitted on 2014-01-29 23:11:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      The whole time I read this -- rather small -- piece, I'm seeing just as much as you describe and it's pretty impressive. I see the cat in my eyes, yet I feel the presence right beside me. I feel as if I'm standing in a dark alley-way, watching the cat dig through rubble and meow in hunger -- and also, I can find the meaning through it.
    It's symbolic yet literal, I like it.
    I can't tell if there's anything wrong with it, because I've found that writing is what you make of it. Styles vary, and no one's to say how a style should go. I like your pattern, so thank you. No grammar issues as far as I can see, either.
    -Chriss.
    | Posted on 2014-02-04 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      And I would. All things/beings need love, regardless of their place, position or status in the universe. Seems easier, however, to love the humble, the suffering, the poor (for me, anyway). They've been left out of the social graces...and are in need of empathy and compassion...which I have been blessed with in abundance. Poor, poor kitty. I'd feed begging eyes...and love his frayed, wrecked fur. This was a treat of a write. I didn't get lost at the first few stanza's as I often do (at no fault to the writer...I think my eyes have more ADHD than the rest of me). This drew me to the end...and brought me here where I felt like I needed to give you a morsel...perhaps because your words were begging? hahaha Thanks for sharing. :) ~K~
    | Posted on 2014-01-31 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    198653

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    Break Up written by WriteSomething
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    Bond written by saartha
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Summer written by layDsayD
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry