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    dots Submission Name: A Rude Awakeningdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Rude Awakeningdots
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    This lonely room
    is not without its parlor tricks
    and I'm one stiff drink away
    from peeling over

    I used to be a star gazer
    amazed and chasing comets
    weighing these wishes
    by moonlight

    Could catch the clock at 11:11
    cross my fingers
    and always beg the same
    close company

    I'd taunt the gods
    vowing heaven on Earth
    and it was freeing
    to pray

    It's been too long
    since I had sound faith
    as dreams portent
    a rude awakening




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    I'd taunt the gods
    vowing heaven on Earth
    and it was freeing
    to pray

    I like that. This, like all the others thus far, is both beautiful and sincere. In everything there is a god and within that god is you...kellyism
    As we get older we understand ourselves more, whether admittedly or not and I find belief in the little things less and less.
    Again, there's the longing, the whispering of wishes to turn things back around.

    Peace
    | Posted on 2014-05-25 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I drink, I love looking at the stars, I always make a wish when I see 11:11, and I'm a Christian. Everything in this was a joyful ride, until the end. And I think that's because that's how I've been feeling lately. I'm trying to get back into my faith though, rather than rely on people to make me happy and give me the right answers. I really liked this one. Me thinks it'sa going to my favorites....
    </3 Lisa
    | Posted on 2014-02-06 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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