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    dots Submission Name: First Glancedots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 517
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    Bytes: 645



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       True love


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    dotsFirst Glancedots
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    I catch just a glimpse
    of an angel it seems,
    an apparition who once
    only existed in dreams.

    And when I caught his attention
    I thought I'd began to doze,
    because there was no way
    that his eyes would've chose

    such imperfection
    on which to gaze.
    So I pinched myself
    to revive from my daze.

    But to my surprise
    instead of waking,
    I came to find
    my eyes weren't faking.

    I made the first move
    and took my chance
    on true love at first sight.
    I found love at first glance.




    Submitted on 2014-01-31 15:55:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was awesome.
    | Posted on 2014-06-23 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      The idea's lovely, but i'm not really fond of the execution. I believe you were aiming for the word 'doze' instead of 'dose' in the second stanza, and the overall grammar is a little iffy. I like the story behind it all, though, so keep going.
    You'll get there over time.
    | Posted on 2014-02-04 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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