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    dots Submission Name: Lifes Gamedots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsLifes Gamedots
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    Why do you hide?
    I just wonder
    Why?
    Why not accept who you are?
    Why not just play your part?
    In this game you'll find yourself
    Although it'll probably put you through hell
    Just keep pushing on
    Never go back
    But if you do
    You'll undergo an attack
    And not one you can win
    Its just a simple fact
    This battle against yourself
    Can be lost just like that
    Think long and hard
    About what you do
    Because you could lose
    With just one wrong move

    Funny how in the end
    Everyone seems to be your friend
    But your still to weary
    To accept and let them in
    Be smart when you start
    This game can be fatal
    It just reminds me
    That we are
    Like the most precious petal
    Of the most beautiful flower
    And we will all just wither away
    With each passing hour...




    Submitted on 2014-02-01 19:05:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was so beautifully written, and then i read the last 6 lines and thought. This is amazing. Great job T, you smashed it outta the park with this homerun.
    | Posted on 2014-02-04 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful..
    | Posted on 2014-02-03 00:00:00 | by Priyaa | [ Reply to This ]


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