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    dots Submission Name: Make me a Sandwhich.dots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Rant/Love
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       just started ranting, nothin special.lol


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    dotsMake me a Sandwhich.dots
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    You spit out words like their burning the flesh in the roof of your mouth
    Your thoughts like crumbling walls, aged and molded feeling like there isnt any way out
    But I just walked right in, and took a look around,
    shook my head.
    Your soul smells old, dusty and bent.
    And suddenly you have nothing to say....while I'm taking you in, I refuse to let you live this way.
    Youll miss the little things
    the placement of shit that you dont even need
    like when she told you no, so you throw out a plea
    She was looking for more
    but she'd never find it here, stale bread like your stale state of mind
    spread with jelly like your constant conversation to fill her up inside.
    That'll do for maybe a week or two, but the lack of flavor, do yourself a favor and dont bother
    no hard work no passion, 2.5 minutes for that sandwhich to happen.
    Many times you realized this, so liek the knife that cuts and spreads, you cut into her body with your utmost agression
    no good intensions
    Feed her to yourself, and you move on.
    No use in reminiscing with a snack just as quick as the rest, forgetful as the next
    Maybe youll miss the ease of spreading your jelly, cutting into a sandwhich that she probably regretted halfway through.
    But these are old memories, so hold in your banter and sit the fuck down.
    I will not make you a sandwhich,
    but a 4 course meal, to straighten you out.




    Submitted on 2014-02-01 21:14:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Haha i aggree with sacrities, the use of food metaphors made this very appealing. Am i hungry or angry? Either way im making a sandwhich.
    | Posted on 2014-06-16 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh thank you so much.I feel like with all our emotions we gotta put a little humor. Glad you like it!:)
    | Posted on 2014-02-04 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, your use of edible metaphors made this funny, yet meaningful. I like that you kept some rhyming in there, instead of just a full blown nonsense rant. I have no criticism to offer. This is definitely going straight to my favorites. Keep writing!
    </3 Lisa
    | Posted on 2014-02-03 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]


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