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    dots Submission Name: Too Much to Beardots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsToo Much to Beardots
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    Lay yourself down
    where I used to pad
    your sheets
    and love
    a memory

    Cross your legs
    where I used
    to mouth secrets
    tongue sweetness
    in revelry

    Drink deep
    sleep around
    with every man
    who casts an empty gaze
    your way

    I'd break these bones
    bending back held hope
    but you fill my void
    with the next best thing
    and I'm suffering

    You swore an oath
    to stay in touch
    never leave me out
    always hold me up
    but broke promises

    You were too hot to hold
    too cold to care
    too stubborn, too bold
    too much to bear




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      Oh my word...it seems every single write I fall into of yours is like one of the saddest caresses of anguish...that just tear at the heart.

    Gosh...how has anyone seen this and not felt something.

    Beautifully speaks of tortured longing

    Beautiful

    Brava bra

    | Posted on 2014-05-31 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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