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    dots Submission Name: lotusdots

    Author: She Is Insane
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 40/60/32
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/
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    vibrant, quietly you lay still
    adorned by fiery dyes,
    enclosed in murky waters,
    but still keeping immaculate,
    not succumbing to treacherous, touching terrains
    absorbing the earth'a hues

    at dusk, you dive into dirt and mud,
    breathing underneath as darkness enfolds,
    but comes dawn and you resurface,
    petals clean and dry, without evidence,
    of last night's dreary encounter

    to be anew each day as the sun rises
    so serenely you transpire
    into the morning dew,
    rippling above the obscure waters,
    extending outwards, absorbing all ugliness,
    emitting beauty to the tip of your leaves

    vibrant, quietly you lay still
    observing the world revolve around you,
    you've made peace with night's fate
    knowing well that light will break in
    to keep you pristine
    accepting your demise and origin

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      Wow and I can't believe just found this now. I must say the first stanza is my fave. This is lovely and thanks for sharing. Nice descriptions here like you turned a poem into a snapshot.

    | Posted on 2014-04-07 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]

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