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    dots Submission Name: I missdots
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    Author: Zai
    ASL Info:    24/m/US
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 66/145/98
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I donno... I just... I donno.


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    dotsI missdots
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    I miss, and I reminisce.
    I miss the moments I never had a chance to miss.
    I reminisce the moments I wish I had half a mind to remember so I could miss them later.
    I wish I had a time machine so I could go back and tell myself to remember these moments because they only happen once.
    To remember that you will only have one mom.
    You will have every chance to say something,
    but if you don't say something,
    your chances will run out.
    And you only have one mom.
    So really, you only have one chance to say it.
    You only have one chance to live and revel in the moment,
    And remember the moments so you have something to hold on to.
    'Cause if you don't have something to hold on to,
    You'll slip and forget and miss the times you wish you could reminisce.
    I'd tell myself this: Don't forget.
    And don't forge a memory that never happened either.
    And believe them when they say she loved you.
    'Cause she did.
    And nothing you've ever seen or thought or remembered but forgot is going to change that.
    It's a fact.
    And it's wrapped up in apologies and mailed to a God you hate for taking her,
    but let it go and know that it got to her.
    The God you hate delivered the message you regret never saying to the mother you wish you could remember more about so you could sit and miss and reminisce about her.
    But now...
    The best you can come up with is: I miss you. I'm sorry mom.
    I love you.
    Where'd you go?




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      great job :)
    | Posted on 2014-02-24 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem makes me want to go and hug my mother. It has such powerful sad emotions laced into this. And although this is about the passing your mom (I would assume) it can also relate to other people you have lost in life. People you took for granted because you never thought they would be taken from you so soon. And it also has a good message about living in the moment, treasuring our present and appreciating people. Your writing hits a nerve with this message.
    | Posted on 2014-02-17 00:00:00 | by She Is Insane | [ Reply to This ]
      Assuming this is personal experience...I am so sorry this has happened to you. From your write, seems a long time ago, so now if you had any memories, they are just memories of those memories...that keep fading with the hands of time.

    I am also sorry you hate and blame God, as if he took her from you. A misconception many often have...and so, you've developed this hatred for someone whom you don't really know, because if you did know him, you'd be feeling the same love for him that you feel for your mother, whom you hardly knew. Your words wrapped tightly around my heart...

    On a writing note, I really enjoyed this sentence, for its fluidity:
    "And nothing you've ever seen or thought,
    or remembered but forgot,
    is going to change that."

    And, understanding this is probably ranting a bit (ES is good for that), if you were to revisit here, and change a few things, might I suggest you break your lines in different places?

    Keep writing...just because it feels good.
    ~kim~
    | Posted on 2014-02-06 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]


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