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    dots Submission Name: Bet On Itdots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.47 - 5/117/132
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsBet On Itdots
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    Somewhere along the way I was lost,
    Then you found me within the dark,
    Now I shine my light amongst the stars.
    Still I cant find you,
    Even with all this light I cant see you.
    Maybe you're still stuck in the dark.
    Maybe I'm just not looking in the right spot.
    Either way I will find you,
    Just like you found me long ago.
    Can I save you?
    That's not up to me.
    Let me and I will.
    Bet on it.




    Submitted on 2014-02-06 00:04:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It reminds me of a lost angel somehow. Excellent job!
    | Posted on 2014-02-10 00:00:00 | by Amaruq | [ Reply to This ]


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