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    dots Submission Name: What They Can't Heardots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.41 - 5/110/127
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsWhat They Can't Heardots
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    You hear that?
    She loves me..
    .....................
    .....................
    No she's telling the truth.
    I know she is.
    .....................
    .....................
    They are two different people.
    You know that as much as I do.
    .....................
    .....................
    She isn't going to do what the other did.
    She promised me that.
    .....................
    .....................
    Well yeah the other said the same thing,
    But this time it's different.
    .....................
    .....................
    See that's the thing..
    I just feel it.
    .....................
    .....................
    I mean you could be right..
    She could be just like the rest.
    .....................
    .....................
    Because I want to believe ok?
    Besides this is good for you.
    .....................
    .....................
    If you are right then I will give up,
    I will be yours to keep.
    .....................
    .....................
    Because I wont have anything to live for after..
    So this body shouldn't go to waste.
    .....................
    .....................
    .....I hope I'm right.....




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      hmm
    | Posted on 2014-02-24 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, I gotta go with these people someplace...

    no, no. Everything's fine...we..

    I'll take care of that as soon as I see a problem...

    As soon as I see a...

    Wait and see...
    | Posted on 2014-02-17 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful! It kind of reminds me of how I thought about my boyfriend.
    | Posted on 2014-02-06 00:00:00 | by Amaruq | [ Reply to This ]


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