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    dots Submission Name: Wolf Tearsdots
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    Author: Amaruq
    Elite Ratio:    1.34 - 3/4/2
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Description:
       So, my boyfriend, whom I liked far more then any other male I know, wants to dump me for his ex and the girl I hate. I saw the text messages he sent her... Ah well... Let's just say I'm not in the best of moods right now. And as the poems states, he is a Eastern wolf therian.
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    dotsWolf Tearsdots
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    Your glossy black fur
    Your beautiful gray-blue eyes
    I felt special in your gaze, and so insnared in your trap, I never could have inferred
    That in your eyes... I was nothing. Lower than dirt and lower than flies.

    From that first time I laid my eyes on you
    I felt a deep connection
    We were both wolves trapped in human skins, me and you,
    Black and white, yin and yang, love and deception.

    I loved you and yet you did not return the favor
    Only pulled my strings until the stage was set for the final act.
    Naive was I, thought I knew what love was. Ne'er did I question your odd behavior.
    And now here I am. Weeping these wolf tears. This battle's lost. Can't fight back.

    Wolf tears... Something soft and dark.
    Unforgiving, unforgotten, undeniable, and full of wild rage
    I won't again pour in my heart
    But just think of you've done, dear black wolf, because now there's hell to pay and a war to wage.

    Rejected for another female feels white-hot and emotional
    Yet when tended for and nurtured, the flame can be contained
    YOU will be the one to be burned, dear black wolf, so if you come near, you are warned!
    This is one she-wolf you failed to maintain.

    So you are warned, black wolf my dear,
    Wolf tears will remind me of my hate, my anger, my sadness, my grief,
    All you did, did tear my flesh, although...
    The tears that are coming will harm YOU more than me, despite your contary belief.




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      I like the first three stanzas. I feel like the last ones are disconnected from the emotion and imagery you portray in the first. The wolf imagery seems forced and your anger breaks through leaving the poem a bit disorganized. But otherwise it's pretty good. I can sense your anger in your writing. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2014-02-17 00:00:00 | by She Is Insane | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the first three stanzas. I feel like the last ones are disconnected from the emotion and imagery you portray in the first. The wolf imagery seems forced and your anger breaks through leaving the poem a bit disorganized. But otherwise it's pretty good. I can sense your anger in your writing. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2014-02-17 00:00:00 | by She Is Insane | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the first three stanzas. I feel like the last ones are disconnected from the emotion and imagery you portray in the first. The wolf imagery seems forced and your anger breaks through leaving the poem a bit disorganized. But otherwise it's pretty good. I can sense your anger in your writing. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2014-02-17 00:00:00 | by She Is Insane | [ Reply to This ]


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