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    dots Submission Name: Inheritance of the Damneddots
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    Author: Draigon
    ASL Info:    25/m/Al
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 164/196/91
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsInheritance of the Damneddots
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    The void ever consuming,
    feeding on urchins
    along the bottom of the ceaseless filth--
    eternal quagmire,
    born out of greed,
    lust for the power
    the sexual thrills of it...

    A glazed sun stares down,
    upon this place of wretched--
    vile pools of lost souls.
    Nary a breeze uttered,
    a sweet smell breathed,
    in the baleful smile
    ripped into this plain
    filled with fetid teeth....

    Stink fists thrust up and then come down
    as they march to the edge
    to be taken in by its guile
    cunning and soullessness.
    A smile worth a thousand swords
    but none to be burdened to carry
    not even the most whimsical of them.

    Alas, the meek is ruled,
    exploitation of their fruits--
    their willful ignorance.
    Epidemics of complacency,
    leaving minds disease ridden,
    deft to the cries
    "Release me from the bonds!"

    Lonely thoughts were set aside,
    along the bramble filled path
    in preparation for the inheritance;
    spiritual decay and servitude,
    cancerous pits of despair,
    weeping and gnashing of teeth,
    seeds of futility.

    Ransomed hearts,
    bodies left to rot beneath the tree,
    life but a glimmer
    lost in the heat of despair
    in this forgotten realm.
    The contract is signed
    "in death you shall reap".




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