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    dots Submission Name: Contradicted Me || part 18dots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       Tagged as comedy because none of the other miscs. really match up.


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    dotsContradicted Me || part 18dots
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    who are we in reality?
    personas made up of trillions of atoms?
    personalities attached to that of Hollywood and government systems?

    humanity is stitched to the seams of a toxic society as we know it
    musical talent decreased to that of 1% of talent

    amped up to 101% trend and riches;
    21st century; women shackled to studded bras, a skirt with no panty
    men shackled to snapbacks, tanks, hightops and fucking bitches

    a hormonal white boy making a mark with enhanced vocal chores and unoriginal R&B lyrics
    a fake blonde loved by no more than fruitless protests
    against long tongues and marijuana limericks

    and if I woke up one day and decided to give a rats ass
    about the next pretty-boy or daddy's-little-girl that went to jail for a DUI
    please shoot me that morning
    for to live like that; I would rather die.




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