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    dots Submission Name: The Place In My Heartdots
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    Author: Amaruq
    Elite Ratio:    1.34 - 3/4/2
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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       To Wayra...
    Free verse poem


    ©Amaruq


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    dotsThe Place In My Heartdots
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    A place in my heart
    Is set aside just for you
    But you bashed it away
    Like trash
    Like a rat
    Like it was nothing to you
    So why am I still sitting here?
    Sitting at your feet like a dog begging for scraps
    Whimpering, "please love me" over and over and over again.
    Maybe it's that tiny spark of hope
    That is in the empty place in my heart
    That is trying to reach out,
    To expand,
    To grow.
    To mutate until it is a beautiful flame shining over our love.
    And then, that empty place in my heart?
    It won't be empty anymore.




    Submitted on 2014-02-10 18:57:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i have been there... i like your poem. though it doesnt rhyme too much. but its raw and has feeling.
    | Posted on 2014-02-13 00:00:00 | by hazeleyes28 | [ Reply to This ]


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