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    dots Submission Name: Convalescencedots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 75/182/217
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 889
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    Description:
       Sorry for my absence, here is something a bit newer for me, a little shift in style. I feel a darker relapse in ideologue coming upon me, so I should have some darker philosophical pieces for you all. Enjoy, and tell me what you think.


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    dotsConvalescencedots
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    It was in fire---the place where atrocities grow.
    It was where they thought---ambitions of ill-reputed dreams.
    It was in truth---the shadows hid well-
    ---after all, the devil was in the detail.

    They spoke in revolutionary ideals---purged of tangible realities.
    They watched in delusionary disbelief---shackled to the derogation of time.
    They failed in absolution---heavy upon their head the crown fell-
    ---after all, the devil was in the detail.

    Power, in and of itself, cannot acquiesce will---an attempt to catch light in hand.
    Power of quid pro quo---with avarice becoming gluttonous rage.
    Power nevertheless breaks all---dreams wither; nightmares swell-
    ---after all, the devil was in the detail.

    Convalescence cannot heal nor mend--the end is the end.
    Convalescence of family and friends---belief of safety until God rends.
    Convalescence is of senescence---deride body; a shade in Hell-
    ---after all, the devil was in the detail.




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    ||| Comments |||
      You ask us to comment what we think, though...you made it unclear as to what we should think in the first place. What detail? What God and what position does the Devil pertain? The roles only seem to make sense to you- now, this occurs to the best of us. I've found myself making absolutely no sense to anyone else but myself. Though, that I cannot comprehend this piece may just be a sign that I hold incompetence towards being part of the ES literati.
    I'd appreciate it greatly if you could PM me the details, or respond with whatever need be necessary.
    Still, although I couldn't get the plot, I did enjoy the read. It's something to sit back and enjoy, maybe not relate to.
    | Posted on 2015-02-21 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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