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    dots Submission Name: A New Namedots
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    Author: TeslaKoyal
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 19/66/85
    Words: 316
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA New Namedots
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    I wanted to call you something
    Though I was not sure what
    Nothing sounded right at all
    My mind seemed to be in a rut
    It couldn't be just anything
    Something other people use
    I wanted it to be special
    A name meant just for you
    The more I thought about it
    The less came to my mind
    I wanted to just forget it
    It seemed a waste of time
    It would not leave my thoughts
    Though on it I had already bailed
    Every name I came up with
    To me was a complete fail
    Ones I liked were already used
    It had to be absolutely unique
    Something nobody else can use
    That something I did seek
    Still I could not find a name
    To call you every single day
    Super Bear seems too long
    Though I thought of it anyway
    Nothing was good enough
    Not Hun, not Babe, nor Bear
    Still I could find no name
    One that says that I care
    I could not find the perfect name
    I brought it up when you called
    Though it was stupid to me
    You did not think that at all
    I looked up some names online
    Some at which I had laughed
    I'd never call you any of them
    They seemed way too half-assed
    You then mentioned a word
    Then you told me what it stood for
    It was weird but I said it a few times
    And then a few times more
    You came up with that name
    It was different and easy to say
    It wasn't what I came up with
    But that's completely okay
    Even though I didn't make it up
    It really fits you perfectly
    The meaning is of love
    And that's what's important to me
    It makes me smile to say it
    It's better than my word kaboomba
    I will call you this word everyday
    You will forever be my Ooma




    Submitted on 2014-02-11 20:53:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the concept of this. The flow was excellent. Great job
    | Posted on 2014-02-11 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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