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    dots Submission Name: Clichedots

    Author: Erreur
    ASL Info:    20 / M / Canada
    Elite Ratio:    7.32 - 19/25/14
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 887
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       A really poorly written poem. But I haven't submitted anything in forever and thought I'd be able to write something better.

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    The world is spurred by songs
    Dedicated to things I don’t understand
    A hymn by dogs, and bronze, and other wrongs
    Which I let pass through me unplanned

    Flowers are ignored in my stride,
    Each one calls out to the passer-by
    Yet its teachings were something I chide
    Something I’d regret the day I die

    Nightfall is the venue of a symphony,
    Its harmonies surrendered from clear skies
    The learned man looks to the stars for destiny
    A song that brings a soul to rise

    Hope, dreams, and other buzz words
    Moves one forward towards their glory
    Building you up, you soar like a bird
    Soon you’ll swoop down and end your story

    May I bloom like one of the flowers!
    Let me be brave and act!
    Stand up and move, be with her in the hour!
    I’m attracted and I must react

    Submitted on 2014-02-13 10:32:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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