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    dots Submission Name: Are you scared?dots
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    Author: blankscreen
    ASL Info:    22/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 222/196/163
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAre you scared?dots
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    I dreamt of you again last night
    You asked what I was so afraid of
    Because I was tossing and turning in my sleep

    I told you I wasn't scared
    But you knew it wasn't all it seemed.
    I've been lying through my teeth

    I know that you are living in my head now
    Taken up residence among my insecurities
    It's sometimes nice to hear your voice though
    Reminding me of who I could be

    It's getting hard to keep up this charade
    When every step is a leap
    And you keep reminding me how scary a leap could be
    I know you are doing well now
    And I am not asking for your sympathy

    You were my best friend once
    I wonder if that's now only in my dreams.






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      I like the way you set a poem out, it shows you have a good control over language.
    | Posted on 2014-07-09 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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