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    dots Submission Name: Letter Linesdots

    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I...think this is a mix of my feelings towards those that do not try to be artists with true passion, instead making half-assed works then faking their victory; flaunting it around with ego, mixed with my distaste towards discrimination against people with different tastes and style, then how modern society's shallow, I guess? As if I'm growing bored of how dull everyone treats life?
    I'm not sure, you tell me.

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    dotsLetter Linesdots

    Petty poets posting pretty poems,
    accuracy along amateur accords.
    I insinuate ill idealism-
    what weakness with weary words.

    Modern merry most malignant;
    such shame shimmering shallow skin.
    Too tangled to tighten true thought;
    pain punctures pure pride, prompting post-riot.

    Lacking lunacy, lone logic-
    would we want what withering world?
    Becoming bored by building blocks.
    Growing gotten, given guides, gratitude grounded; Gods gold...?

    Cold, cannot call
    Freezing for flying, fall failed
    Only outsiders off-limits on open Oceans;
    run, run, rough roads rolling rocky rails.

    Viewing vast variables;
    yours yearns yanking.
    Doubling down - downright dirty,
    feel fowl for faking.

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    | Posted on 2015-02-21 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't think I've seen a poem based on same letters....
    I know there's a word for that but right now it escapes me....

    anyway, I think, forced in such a way as you are to pick words in that nature you've done an exemplary job breaking words and I think that's kind of cool, like I find words and concepts or the clutch of feeling extremely difficult and complex and (magical)

    it's hard to exhibit control or command control
    of such conceptualizations - it kind of amazes me "people" (in the derogatory sense) would would unwind miles and miles of rope (making it more and more easy to hang themselves) rather than working within a confined space.

    Anyway, just wanted to say you have limited yourself and made a good offering here.
    | Posted on 2015-02-17 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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