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    dots Submission Name: Starvation Wagesdots
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    Author: Bang
    ASL Info:    38/F/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 21/24/16
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Misc
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    dotsStarvation Wagesdots
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    Delayed salary are not sweet.
    They are like sour gummi candies,
    I am excited but I am worried
    What if they stick to my teeth and
    causes tooth decay




    Submitted on 2014-02-17 21:00:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Delayed salaries are never sweet
    They are like sour gummi candies

    I'm excited but I'm also worried

    What if they stick to my teeth
    and cause tooth decay?


    I made a few minor tweaks that you may use or ignore as you please. BTW, delayed salaries are even worse if all that they can purchase are sour gummi candies. yep...
    | Posted on 2014-02-20 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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