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    dots Submission Name: Currents Life, More Peacefullydots
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    Author: siroez
    ASL Info:    27/Male/WV
    Elite Ratio:    5.23 - 101/87/44
    Words: 259
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
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    Description:
       As much as I enjoy life possibly returning to some type drift peace, I kind of hope for an adventure and a beach too.


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    Currents Life, More Peacefully


    The pain I feel will pass from me. Like the tide of the ocean, washing away my torment. The water retracts, as I am taken to new waters, where the undertow takes me to new depths. Here I will find solstice. The deep shades of blue and green. The occasional bright color of the sea, a gleam in my eye, a feeling of serenity, as the wind blows above the surface. Not drowning. Not gasping for air. Peacefully drifting with the rest of the water. Beautiful white birds fly above the surface. Upward further puffy clouds of comfort swoon me, as I drift right away. They are passing, and leaving but a drift of cool air against the ocean. I am at one with myself. I have found peace. If I'm lucky again, I'll flow right into the jet stream, or, the deepest darkest part of the ocean, where no light shines. Truth be told, I have not sunken yet to discover the distance from top to bottom. I have never. Bigger creatures swim there... Life wow. What amazing pouring of rain made this vast deep liquid sea, a' ray? Oh the wonders of life, Which we all flow with one way or the other. For the Earth Mother, I wish I wash up on a beautiful beach, again, for a new lesson, for life to teach. Hope with wonder, sparkling in my eye, a new lesson. It feels good to freely believe. With a cool ocean breeze, I inhale and breathe life.




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