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    dots Submission Name: A Playful Mistakedots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA Playful Mistakedots
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    She knows I don't like bangs.
    But she gets them anyway.
    For her I learn to love them.
    Cause it just might get me laid.

    I sweep them to the side.
    She rearranges them in front.
    A tasteful action on her part.
    Because I am too blunt.

    We undress in a timely fashion.
    Jump into bed to freely unwind.
    I get it in and sweep her bangs.
    She jumps off and says "another time."

    So what did I learn from my mistake?
    To not be hasty and leave it be.
    It was a cheap shot to her confidence.
    And I lost the chance to give her the D.




    Submitted on 2014-02-21 21:43:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Haha nice lmao can't...breathe! Haha!
    | Posted on 2014-07-15 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      halarious.
    | Posted on 2014-06-01 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha! Sally...too funny.


    Honestly, I laughed the whole way through...sorry, not in a bad way but a very "oh, how gallant of you" sorta way. Crapper dude you do have a way huh!?

    I liked it. Not typical but why on earth would we want that everyday ?

    Peace
    | Posted on 2014-05-12 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      OH---Kay
    | Posted on 2014-02-25 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]


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