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    dots Submission Name: Writer's Blockdots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWriter's Blockdots
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    I miss the way you lingered
    at the edge of my conscious
    parting the door slightly open
    to watch me sleep naked beneath the moon

    You'd whisper in sighs your secrets and your dreams
    over and over, just hoping
    I'd take them to the birds and they would
    shout them to the sky

    You'd leave before I woke up
    but not before kissing me gently
    with your parting words
    of Euphoria and Eureka and Truth

    I'd open my eyes in comfort and in ecstasy
    Taking my heart out of its box
    my brain from under the bed
    to bring butterflies and flowers back into my eyes

    but you have been absent lately
    so my brain gathers spider-webs
    and my heart beats more slowly
    and i see no truth nor understanding

    the moon doesn't rise and the sun
    came only for the euphoria
    i keep constant in this state but i don't miss the sleep
    (the spider-webs wouldn't tell me if i did)

    i miss the way you lingered
    at the edge of my conscious
    i sit and stand and walk around
    but all my doors are closed




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      Silver said it all. I'll just add my excellent - you sublimely touch emotion. - Jim
    | Posted on 2014-03-04 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Loved this!--easy to relate to as it is written with such sincerity and conviction. Beautiful imagery conveys well the loss of motivation , the loss of dreams, the helpless emptiness --- simply but effectively. My favorite was the two lines repeated at the start and end of the poem, "i miss the way you lingered
    at the edge of my conscious"---and also the contrasti of emotions in those two verses. Well done
    Silver
    | Posted on 2014-02-25 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]


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