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    dots Submission Name: The Storm dots
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    Author: MmR
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    Class/Type: Misc/Angry
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    dotsThe Storm dots
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    ...and I turned you 
    Into my break from the storm,
    Though I worried ...

    (More than I'll ever admit)

    ...how much this could hurt
    For both of us.

    (But mostly you)

    It seems however,
    You're far less damaged
    Than I had determined you to be...
    Leaving me to be the one crying

    (In the break from the storm)





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