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    dots Submission Name: A Little Something...dots
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    Author: nikita2u
    ASL Info:    26 Female Wonderlandlust
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 404/396/239
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       Though we will never visit the ocean with me on your handle bars, and though the dreams we once made haven't come to fruition, you were the friend I always needed. The ear that heard between the lines. And the stain on my heart.

    I think we're both better off, yet it will never be goodbye.

    I miss you my midnight friend.

    Dedicated in Fullness to Michael. Not to who you wanted me to believe but to who you actually are. For both faces are beyond beautiful.


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    There are times that I sit and ponder the moments we held hands and smiled to each other. We had our moments, fights and arguments, yet with our backs to the world we created a home in each others arms. In moments of weakness you were the strength while I remained the laughter.

    Now I move along more slowly. Running in place on a sandy beach of my own making. I never thought you'd go away, for you were the sun while I sat in the shade. Though the days have passed, fallen leaves now fill the empty spaces where once we slept face to face. Now we packed each other off and pushed open the doors of farewell. Yet I still dream of the days in the past, where the future was just around the bend.

    But now I'm moving on. No echoes of sadness, no longer do I stay out of sight. For the wings you clipped on your way out have regrown in respite. I can't seem to say goodbye, for how do you let go of a dream? With time it will fade, along with your smile as the crinkles on our faces deepen. Yet despite it all I have you to thank for helping me find faith, sanity, and reason.





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      To dreams, Nikki.
    To dreams.
    | Posted on 2014-06-28 00:00:00 | by Urisen | [ Reply to This ]
      I really read this at the right time. I don't really offer critique anymore, not that this is something that calls for it anyhow. Blah blah, anyhow....recently I lost a close friend of mine. When I discovered that he had written me a letter that I never responded to, I broke down and cried for the first time in many years. It's a simple relation to this piece, but I thought I'd share that with you. I really liked this.


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    | Posted on 2014-03-13 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]


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