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    dots Submission Name: Eternity Is Just A Dreamdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210/104/71
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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    dotsEternity Is Just A Dreamdots
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    Too good to be true
    For me this is you
    Loving
    Caring
    And so very sweet
    Its hard to believe
    That its all just for me
    Its like your a dream
    From which I dont want to leave
    And in this dream
    Its just you and me
    Together forever
    In our own little world
    Then I awaken
    And from you I am pulled
    Until you drive up
    And brighten my day
    With the sweet little kisses
    And things that you say
    'Ill always love you,
    And with you Ill stay.'
    I wanna be
    Wrapped in your arms
    For all eternity...
    Too bad...
    Its all just a dream...




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