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    dots Submission Name: superfluousdots
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    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 601
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    we don’t take sharing lightly—
    it leads to the following void
    left by the unsharing’s end—
    conversations about school
    i’m holding that nostalgia sneaking
    out of theaters mid thought of
    aging and drying, was it a lie I told?
    persistence when observance will do,
    is this a passive life?
    my favorite parts recalled
    when I felt foolish noticing
    the narrow waist hidden in oversized
    Goodwill jeans and the pearl-
    buttoned shirts leaving me aglow,
    the flush across my cheeks,
    his memory preferred.
    i catch myself mirrored, warmth
    created from intimate moments so
    easily lifted—it’s all superfluous,
    created through my own will.




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